My New Song


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  Posted on December 25, 2016 05:55
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New song.

Could I get some thoughts on my new song? :)
  Posted on December 25, 2016 06:32
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you're monotone and you're flow is choppy at times.

you have a bad mic.

you have bad generic lyrics.

no offense but you can't sing, you can harmonize words and maybe a bar or two but don't try and sing for an extended time.
  Posted on December 25, 2016 06:36
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Flatbush wrote:
you're monotone and you're flow is choppy at times.

you have a bad mic.

you have bad generic lyrics.

no offense but you can't sing, you can harmonize words and maybe a bar or two but don't try and sing for an extended time.
The verses were 3 different people, which order did you think was best?
  Posted on December 25, 2016 06:40
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Sandmanxx23 wrote:
Flatbush wrote:
you're monotone and you're flow is choppy at times.

you have a bad mic.

you have bad generic lyrics.

no offense but you can't sing, you can harmonize words and maybe a bar or two but don't try and sing for an extended time.
The verses were 3 different people, which order did you think was best?

all 3 are basically on the same level, 2nd had the best flow, last was the worst.
  Posted on December 25, 2016 06:42
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Flatbush wrote:
Sandmanxx23 wrote:
Flatbush wrote:
you're monotone and you're flow is choppy at times.

you have a bad mic.

you have bad generic lyrics.

no offense but you can't sing, you can harmonize words and maybe a bar or two but don't try and sing for an extended time.
The verses were 3 different people, which order did you think was best?

all 3 are basically on the same level, 2nd had the best flow, last was the worst.
Aight, respect the opinion thanks. Anything you thought was good?
  Posted on December 25, 2016 06:46
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Sandmanxx23 wrote:
Flatbush wrote:
Sandmanxx23 wrote:
The verses were 3 different people, which order did you think was best?

all 3 are basically on the same level, 2nd had the best flow, last was the worst.
Aight, respect the opinion thanks. Anything you thought was good?

beat was good, not much else to really get into since you're obviously still new to this., just work on you're flow(just rap verses all the time,everyday) and don't write generic pop lyrics.
  Posted on December 25, 2016 07:10
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first one was pretty bad, the other 2 could manage to come with something decent with a better mic and some vocal edits
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  Posted on December 25, 2016 07:23
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middle verse would be really good with a better mic.
others are whatever.
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  Posted on December 25, 2016 17:03
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well, you should just work on your voice.
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  Posted on December 25, 2016 21:32
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I liked the intro and the feel to it, but you should really work on vocals. I couldn't stand 1 verse of it before closing the tab.
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